Rhian bio aplication (fixed and finished)

[rhian]

001. NAME• Rhian D'hivael 002. NICKNAME• none
003. REAL AGE• 250
004. HOW OLD YOU LOOK?• 27
005. BIRTHDATE• sometime during the revolutionary war
006. WHERE YOU LIVE?• ny
007. AND YOU FEAST ON?• humans and animals

001. YOUR FACE• kiera knightly
002. HAIR•dark chesnut brown003. EYES• eyes that change color from steal grey to emerald green
004. HIEGHT• 5 feet 5 inches
005. WEIGHT• 140
006. BODY MODS• 3 piercings in each ear and a nose piercing she has a tatoo of a scotish thistle on her ankle
007. FASHION/STYLE• her style is earthy and a bit dark but noth gothic Rhian does not like to dress in colorful colors or desines she preffers to stick to casual cloths like t shirts , jeans, and trench coats

001. LIKES• gardens, animals, blood, the woods, being alone, roses
002. DISLIKES• pushy and annoying creatures, deep water, loud annoying noises, sunlight, bright light, spiders, the smell of bell peppers
003. FEARS• deep water , other vampires,, sunlight, spiders
004. STRENGTHS• agility, strength, extreamly fast, cunning, intelligant
005. WEAKNESSES• sunlight, stoborness, temper,
006. ODDITIES• cracks knuckles when she gets nervous, growels when she gets angry, fast temper , likes to collect fossils
007. ORIENTATION• likes men/straight
008. SPECIFIC MORALS•she is an oprotunistic hunter what ever comes her way but she prefers to hunt humans that are vile and evill that way she does not feal bad when she kills them. the animals she wont hunt are canines, felines, rats and baby animals
009. PERSONALITY OVERVIEW• Rhian is stuborn , and hot tempered she can be nice when she wants to be because of her past she rarely trusts other vampires fully and she is verry aloof and preffers to stay in the shadows . but when rhian finaly trusts someone she is extreamly loyal and trust worthy

001. PARENT ONE• darious mac spadden / nolonger living
002. PARENT TWOpearl macspadden/ nolonger living003. SIBLINGS• none known there could have been one or two after she left.
004. PETS• a mountian lion she rescued from a steal trap his name is scar
005. HISTORY OVERVIEW•
born during the time of american revolution she was the daughter of a wealthy scotish merchant whom opperated out of ft ticonderoga ny. because rhian was an old maid by colonial standaerd ,Rhians parents forced her to marry a german mercinary who was hired by the british forces , this mercinary opperated his team only during the night and on top of that the wedding was at night which rhian thought was wierd. on her wedding night Rhian was turned in a violent act . her husband a vampire beat her and used her as a slave . one night when he went out on patrol she escaped his guards into the night and never looked back. She now lives in ny city in abandoned wearhouses hoping never to see her late husband again

Even though Rhians home base is ny state she does travel around the world and the usa at times she is a very curious creature. After she escaped from her husband She hid in the adirondack mountians for many yrs. She had to learn on her own what she was. Rhian spent a few yrs living with the mohawk indians after the revolution, they concidered her a spirit ofsome sort . After and incident where at one point her husband was trying to find her he slaughtered several of the tribe people she was living with. She fled again this time to scotland the land where she was origionaly from and spend a normal life in the hill sides of scott land mostly dining and surviving on cattle. in the 2o centry she came back to ny and has lived thier ever scince except for the occational trip here and there. a few yrs ago she found a mountian lion cub stuck in a trap. Rhian freed the creature taught it how to hunt and it has been her devoted pet ever scince

Yo', my name is Leah, and I've been the walking dead for 27 years, and I've been grave robbing for 6 I dug up lovely Crimson Kiss by means of randomness and adore it.

001. ANYTHING ELSE?• questions, comments, anything...
002. ROLE PLAY SAMPLE•

give us your very best over 200 words.

Rhian couched at the edge of a forest in upstate ny , her trenchcoat bellowed behindher in the cool crisp night air. She sniffed the air and groweled waiting for her prey to get closer.

A huge bull elk stood nearby scraping its large antlers into a large pine tree. the smell of pine and dirt filled the night air combining with the warm breath of the elk

Rhians eyes started to glow, she balled up her fist and pounced ontop of the elks back quickly and with a loud crunch biting down hard onto the animals neck, sending a thick irony smelling blood streaming onto the forest floor.

The elk screached and started to run as fast as it could go untill it finaly colapsed into exastion. Rhian drank almost all of its blood leaving it alive *she stood wiping the blood off of her face with a muddy hand smearing the blood, mud, and various leaves onto her face

rhian turned into the woods and whistled. A large mountian lion bounded through the brush, jumped and landed on to the elk with great relish and tore ino the animals fleash.

Rhian laughed wickedly and walked into the shadows of the night leaving the lion to to his meal.

Through the darkness of the night she ran, further and further into the shadows of the woods. Rhian always loved the darkeness, the aloneness and the almost nothingness of the woods. She loved how the wind played with her long chesnut hair in long dancing ribbons behind her as she ran. The sharp musty pine and earth smell of the debri of the forest floor invigorated her as she ran. She suddenly slid to a stop as the remains of an old mill stood before her next to a small creek. She streched and yawned as the faint glimmer of the morning sunrise begining to strech in the furthermost point of the sky. with a loud sigh she fled into the ruins into the part of the mill that was still standing into its dark lonely cold corners to endure the captivity of the day..................................

[*sombra delgadillo]

I have a couple things I'd like you to tweak on your applicaton:

• I want a more developed style section. It's not telling you to just list one outfit. Go into details of what she wears on a daily basis, why she wears it, etc.
  
• The code is fouling up around the "Siblings" section. Try your best to fix that.
  
• Finally, I'd like a more detailed history. At least one more paragraph the same size as the one you already have typed.
  

Thanks, Ray

[rhian]

ok no prob i fixed the app

Nov 3, 2009 10:16:40 GMT -5 *sombra delgadillo said:

I have a couple things I'd like you to tweak on your applicaton:

• I want a more developed style section. It's not telling you to just list one outfit. Go into details of what she wears on a daily basis, why she wears it, etc.
  
• The code is fouling up around the "Siblings" section. Try your best to fix that.
  
• Finally, I'd like a more detailed history. At least one more paragraph the same size as the one you already have typed.
  

Thanks, Ray

[*sombra delgadillo]

Much better. In your posts try to refrain from abbreviations like "yrs". And it would be appreciated if you capitalized things like "NY" and "USA". Thanks and apologies for puting you through the motions. Welcome to CK!